High-scoring IELTS Writing Model Essays 2021-2022
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High-scoring Writing Model Essays 2021 - 2022
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IELTS Writing Sample tháng 1 - 2022
Cùng chữa ngay một đề Writing task 2 rất khó ngày 20/01/2022 nhé.
Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (20-01-2022)
Với đề bài này, chúng ta cần discuss cả 2 quan điểm:
Body 1: Quan điểm 1: students make comments or even criticism on teachers có thể improve educational quality như thế nào?
Ngày nay, education = service, students = customers, teachers = service provider
=> customers make complaints, providers make rectification
Cụ thể, các giáo viên sẽ phải cẩn thận hơn về lesson planning và communication trong lớp => deliver the best lessons
Body 2: Quan điểm 2: students make comments or even criticism on teachers có thể gây ra loss of respect and discipline in the classroom như thế nào?
Direct argument between teachers and students in the classroom => lose temper, waste time of other 40 students when teachers have to spend time arguing with 1 or 2
Sau khi đã phân tích cả 2 quan điểm trên, chúng ta có thể đưa ra ý kiến của riêng mình (give your own opinion) ở phần Kết bài (Conclusion)
Conclusion: cần phải thực hiện việc này thật cẩn thận, thông qua indirect feedback như là notes, letters, message boxes, hoặc là private direct conversation.
II. Bài làm:
There are conflicting opinions on whether high school students should be allowed to comment or criticize their teachers. From my perspective, although this proposal theoretically can enhance educational quality, its practice must be carefully executed so as to maintain order and the collective benefit of all students in the classroom.
One the one hand, it is completely reasonable that feedback from students can improve teaching quality. In this day and age, education is gradually becoming a service, while leaners and teachers are also customers and service providers respectively. As a consequence, it is completely natural for customers to make complaints when they are not satisfied with the service they receive. This process undoubtedly improves the quality of the service as the providers can make rectification. In particular, teachers will need to be more careful with lesson planning and in-class communication in order to bring their students the best lessons.
On the other hand, improper execution of the aforementioned theory can cause some detrimental impacts. First, in the process of giving and receiving negative feedback, direct arguments between teachers and students in the classroom are unavoidable, which easily lead to disorder and cause the individuals involved to lose their temper, and inappropriate words can be spoken. Moreover, in case the teacher has to waste time answering the questions of a couple of unsatisfied students when the other 40 are completely satisfied, the overall benefit of the entire class will be adversely affected.
The arguments presented above lead to a conclusion that the key to success of this proposal lies in careful implementation. In order to avoid direct conflict in the process of exchanging feedback, indirect means of communication including message boxes, notes, and letters should be utilized. Unsatisfied students can also have a private direct conversation with their teachers in order to have a detailed discussion. These approaches will ensure that unsatisfied students’ opinions are heard while the valuable in-class time of other students are not wasted.
(326 words, band 7.0)
IELTS Writing Sample tháng 12
Đề bài: Some people think that hosting international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
1. Dàn ý:
Body 1: thừa nhận ý kiến 2
- Finance: build expensive new venues for sports/infrastructure and facilities - the costs can exceed millions of dollars
- High risk of spreading contagious disease (Covid – 19): influx international travelers => large crowds of spectators => ideal for the spread of the virus
Tuy nhiên: - High vaccination coverage rate (tỉ lệ che phủ vaccine cao) and herd community (miễn dịch cộng đồng) => safe
Body 2: ý kiến của người viết đồng ý với Advantages:
- Investment and profits: Receive substantial revenue from ticket sales, tourist spending, and television rights => make a large profit - Popularize the image of the host: friendly people, good environment => increase international cooperation, especially in commerce and tourism
2. Bài làm:
Recently, there are contrasting viewpoints regarding the pros and cons of organizing sports events with the participation of teams from different countries. In my opinion, despite some drawbacks including construction costs and the risk of spreading diseases, the benefits of these events, namely opportunities for the host to make profits and popularize their image, are much more convincing.
For once, it is completely reasonable for some people to believe that hosting international sport tournaments is disadvantageous. This is because the cost required to construct the infrastructure and facilities for such events can reach millions of dollars, which might be unaffordable for some developing countries. Moreover, the spread of contagious diseases, such as the COVID-19, is another plausible reason. During these events, the influx international travelers and large crowds of spectators inside the stadium or gymnasium create ideal conditions for the spread of the virus. However, I firmly believe that with the increasing vaccination coverage rates and herd community witnessed in many countries nowadays and in the future, it is rather safe to welcome foreign sports fans.
In contrast, from a personal perspective, the opposite viewpoint is much more agreeable due to the advantages of international sports tournaments. First, they provide the host countries with opportunities to receive great amounts of revenue from ticket sales, tourist spending, and television rights. In other words, this is only the problem of investment and return, and if properly managed, these events are wonderful chances to enrich the national budget.
Furthermore, the image of the host with friendly people and good environment can be popularized, which results in an increase in international cooperation, especially in commerce and tourism. This had been proven by the success of the 2003 SEA Games in Vietnam.
In conclusion, despite the existence of some finance and safety concerns, I hold a strong belief that sports events are golden opportunities for economic growth, and they can be successfully organized with careful planning and precautions.
(323 words, band 7.5)
IELTS Writing Sample tháng 11
Đề ngày 27/11
Sample answer :
The provided pictures illustrate how the process of filtering and storing water for family use happens together with its components.
Generally, this process requires the installment of 3 metal containers with the volume of 200 liters which are situated on elevated platforms. All the containers must be sealed due to being located outdoor. A noteworthy detail is that the entire process is automatic since water flows down from the top container to the bottom one under gravitational force.
Specifically, the tank for untreated water sits on the top platform and is connected to the next container by means of a tap. The next container, which is placed on a lower platform, is the sand filter. Water enters this tank through an inlet tap at the top right-hand corner. Here, it is filtered by a thick layer of sand and a thin layer of small stones. Then, the water reaches a pipe with small holes at the bottom.
The third container on the bottom platform is for water storage. The water from the sand filter enters this tank also from a tap at the top right-hand corner. It can be used by a tap and a bucket, and the process finishes. (200words, 15 minutes).
Some people say charities should help to people who are in the greatest need no matter where they live, while some others say they should focus on people in their country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Body 1: Reasons to help people in their own country:
1. Human nature: Donators can be persuaded easily to send help to people living in the same community, geographic regions, ethnic groups, and nation
=> Sense of belonging (n): cảm giác thuộc về một tập thể, cộng đồng
2. Nationalism (n): chủ nghĩa dân tộc / national unity (n): sự đoàn kết dân tộc: when people of the same country support each other for the collective benefit of the country
Example: Vietnam, storms and flooding in the central provinces => individuals and organizations from the North and the South immediately send help
Body 2: Reasons to help the most miserable people regardless of their places of living
1. The original and fundamental meaning of charity: support individuals in times of peril => geographic, national, and territorial differences should not become barriers
2. The ability of international charitable organizations, for instance The Red Cross:
Have branches and offices worldwide => timely reach and support people in any country.
III. Sample answer:
Recently there are different views on whether charitable organisations should send material and financial aid to the most miserable individuals regardless of their places of living, or should they concentrate on helping people from their own country. From a personal perspective, despite some obvious reasons for the latter idea, it seems that the former one is much more agreeable due to the core principle of charity and the operational ability of international organizations.
On the one hand, it is understandable why some people believe prefer giving support to their own countrymen. It is much easier for donators to be persuaded to send help to people sharing some similarities, such as those belonging to the same community, geographic region, or ethnic group. This creates a sense of belonging in all members of such communities or groups. Moreover, nationalism has always been a mainstream ideology in many countries. When people of a country give assistance to each other for the collective benefit of the nation, national unity is achieved. Vietnam can be a great example; when natural disasters such as storms or flooding happened in the central region last year, individuals and organizations from the north and the south immediately joined hand and sent their support.
On the other hand, from my viewpoint, the poorest members of society should be the first ones to receive assistance regardless of where they live. The most original and fundamental meaning of philanthropy is to provide sufficient support to individuals in times of peril. There are countless examples from victims of war in the Middle East to African inhabitants who suffer from hunger. These people surely deserve to receive support, and geographical, national, and territorial differences should not become barriers. Another important point is that international philanthropic organisations, The Red Cross for instance, have established branches and offices globally. This enables them to operate worldwide and timely reach poverty-stricken individuals who are in desperate need of their help.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned arguments, the poorest should always be prioritised despite their living locations. (339 words, band 7.0)
IELTS Writing sample tháng 7
Đề 1: Large companies use sports events to promote their products.
Some people think this has a negative impact on sports.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining.
Why do you think it is happening?
How to solve this issue?
Đề 3: In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the Internet. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
IELTS Writing Sample tháng 6
Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style.
Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society. Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
IELTS Writing Sample tháng 5
Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Video phân tích:
✔ Topic How the government allocates its budget on public health
✔ Viewpoint Focusing more on promoting a healthy lifestyle rather than spending on treatment
✔ Question Agree/disagree, to what extent
The state spending on public health has become a widely perpetual concern. Some individuals argue that these already scarce resources should be reserved for the prevention of lifestyle-related illness. In my opinion, the government should focus more on the prevention of illnesses rather than medical treatment.
On the one hand, certain acute diseases, non-preventable regardless of governmental efforts to promote a healthy lifestyle, still need a state budget allocation for medical care. One of the primary duties of the government is to provide publicly funded healthcare to the whole population. Therefore, covering therapeutic and medical costs for those already developing symptoms of acute conditions would be a significant part of that duty, helping mitigate the financial burden associated with those maladies. In other words, a dearth of investment in treatment would be devastating patients’ individual life and wreaking havoc on overall social welfare.
On the other hand, promoting a healthy lifestyle as a prevention strategy is meant to avoid the entire economic burden of chronic diseases, affecting a significant proportion of the population. Those conditions, occurring across different life course stages, share common preventable risk factors relating to unhealthy behaviors, including poor nutrition, inadequate physical activity, and chronic heavy drinking and smoking. If left unchecked, trends in chronic diseases risk factors combined with a growing and aging population will increase the numbers of people living with chronic conditions, later causing the heavy burden of illness in patients, their families, and the community. Therefore, given a scarcity of state budgets for various public services, the government should directly provide information, including health education campaigns, or regulating information, such as limits on advertising and guidelines on food labelings. As a result, positive changes in individual lifestyle would follow, helping them withstand the ravages of time, and saving the state budget for other economically beneficial needs, such as technological investment, education, and infrastructure, rather than spending on treatment.
In conclusion, while allocating its healthcare budget in treatment, the government should promote a healthy lifestyle to avoid preventable chronic diseases due to its economic rationality.
IELTS Writing Sample tháng 4
Đề thi ngày 10/4
Some people are of the opinion that women should play an equal role in police or military forces like the army. Others believe that this work is unsuitable for women. Discuss both views and give your opinion (10/04/2021).
Video phân tích:
✔ Topic: Gender equality in military service and law enforcement
✔ Viewpoints: (1) these professions are unsuitable for women; (2) women should enjoy gender justice.
✔ Questions: Discuss both views, give opinion
✔ [Topic] has become a controversial/debatable topic. Some individuals argue that [Viewpoint 1], while others believe that [Viewpoint 2]. In this essay, I would discuss both of these perspectives before drawing my own conclusion.
Gender equality in military service and law enforcement has become a controversial topic. Some individuals believe that women are not well-adapted to those professions, while others argue that gender equality should be ensured in those fields. In this essay, I would discuss both of these perspectives before drawing my reasoned conclusion.
On the one hand, those opposed to the idea of women joining police ranks and serving in the military might believe in inherent disparities relating to physio capacity and potential distractions caused by men-versus-men competition for women’s attention. Firstly, due to biological characteristics, women might be less likely to meet the physical standards than their male counterparts. The campaigning of gender equity in military forces might become a mere tokenism, adversely impacting combat units’ effectiveness by lowering the standards just for equating the level of female and male presence. Secondly, men and women standing shoulder to shoulder might influence the military and police’s integrity and professionalism detrimentally. Those influenced by Darwinist aphorism might think that women could distract heterosexual male officers from their ever-essential role and duty, especially in combat or criminal arresting missions. Ever-growing sexual harassment accusations in various male-dominated areas might highlight a practical example of the potentials of complicated sexual relations and interactions between male and female officers, severely impacting their effectiveness of their duty, especially given that a state budget burden has been of significant concern for taxpayers.
On the other hand, there are several reasons the military and law enforcement should allow women participation. Firstly, if the military shifts its policy to recognize the long-forgotten role of women in combat, it will be swiftly translated as shattering the glass ceiling of the last front challenging generations of feminists and those fighting against gender discrimination. Allowing women to draft for the military, along with women elected as heads of states, would be a harbinger for the epoch of gender equality. Also, despite the disinclination to acknowledge women’s combat duty and rejection to open its door to these long-considered second-class citizens, women have been actively involved in several domestic and global conflicts. In other words, the full recognition of women’s status in the military would indicate that the government values contribution by its citizens equally and justly, ultimately enabling women to be successful in this traditionally male-hegemonistic field. Secondly, women could bring fundamental changes to the policing culture, which is recently under strict scrutiny and criticism. Women with skillful communication could help diffuse contentious situations because they are less likely to use excessive force. Given the heightened growing tensions between sheriff’s departments and communities they serve, women could improve police-community relations as they tend to rely less on physical force or weapons and more on effective communication.
In conclusion, despite some valid arguments of opposing women joining military and law enforcement relating to the sex-borne innate biological differences and the harmful impact of male competition for female attention, I am more convinced that gender equality should be prioritized due to the idea of reaching gender justice and women’s capacity as effective communicators to improve police-community connections.
Đề thi ngày 17/4
It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as the South pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?
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Đề thi ngày 24/4
Today different types of robots are developed which are good friends to us and help us both at home and work. Is this a positive or negative development?
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Đề thi Task 1 Bar 29/4
Distances travelled by different means of transport thì làm thế nào đây?
Đề thi Writing ngày 27/3
Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are most successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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